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The line graph provides information about the amount of money which was earned monthly by four restaurants in a city in 2010.

The line graph provides information about the amount of money which was earned monthly by four restaurants in a city in 2010. Overall, what stands out from the graph is that there were considerable upwards trends in the income of Delicacy, Evening paradise and Grand Fiesta, while the earnings of Spicy Fortune witnessed a considerable fall over the year. Another interesting point is that Spicy Fortune was the most popular restaurant in January, but in December, Evening Paradise earned more money than the others. Looking at the details, in January 2010, Spicy Fortune was the biggest earner with a monthly income of almost $160, 000. In the following months, its earnings first fluctuated and then declined steadily before ending at nearly $50, 000 in December. In contrast, the monthly incomes of other three restaurants went up by varying degrees. There was a rise in Delicacy’s earnings over the first ten months, followed by a sudden increase to $120, 000 in December. Grand Fiesta and Evening Paradise started with significantly different figures in January, about $100, 000 and $50, 000, respectively. The former experienced a steady fall until June, but after that, income rose significantly to just under $140, 000 in December. Likewise, the trend for Evening Paradise was upward. From January to July, earnings doubled from about $50, 000 to nearly $100, 000 and ended the year with the highest income of around $190, 000.
The line graph provides information about the amount of money which
was earned
monthly by four restaurants in a city in 2010.

Overall
, what stands out from the graph is that there were considerable upwards trends in the
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income
of Delicacy, Evening
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paradise
and Grand Fiesta, while the
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earnings
of Spicy Fortune witnessed a considerable fall over the year. Another interesting point is that Spicy Fortune was the most popular restaurant in January,
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but
in December, Evening
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Paradise
earned more money than the others.

Looking at the
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details
, in January 2010, Spicy Fortune was the biggest earner with a monthly
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income
of almost $160, 000. In the following months, its
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earnings
first
fluctuated and then declined
steadily
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before
ending at
nearly
$50, 000 in December.

In contrast
, the monthly
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incomes
of other three restaurants went up by varying degrees. There was a rise in Delicacy’s
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earnings
over the
first
ten months, followed by a sudden increase to $120, 000 in December. Grand Fiesta and Evening
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Paradise
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started
with
significantly
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different
figures in January, about $100, 000 and $50, 000,
respectively
. The former experienced a steady fall until June,
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but
after that,
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income
rose
significantly
to
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under $140, 000 in December.
Likewise
, the trend for Evening
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Paradise
was upward. From January to July,
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earnings
doubled from about $50, 000 to
nearly
$100, 000 and ended the year with the highest
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income
of around $190, 000.

IELTS academic The line graph provides information about the amount of money which was earned monthly by four restaurants in a city in 2010.

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