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The line graph indicates variations in amount and sort of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers between 1975 and 2000.

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The line graph indicates variations in amount and sort of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers between 1975 and 2000. Overall, junk food, like hamburgers and pizza saw a dramatical increase in usage, meanwhile fish and chips started to be eaten less. Initially, in 1975, hamburgers and pizza were consumed about 10 times per year. The statistics of these products show that the growth continued till 1995, reaching slightly over 80 times. From that period until 2000, there was a stability in consumption of these types of fast food. On the other hand, fish and chips, at first were consumed 100 times per year, which is the highest score. Till about 1985, there was a fluctuation, around 85 times each year. Starting from that period, the trend began to go down sharply, reaching its lowest point in 2000, fish and chips were consumed just under 40 times each year.
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. The statistics of these products
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. From that period until 2000, there was a stability in consumption of these types of
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100
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IELTS academic The line graph indicates variations in amount and sort of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers between 1975 and 2000.

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