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The line graph illustrates the percentage of households with electrical appliances and number of hours per week, per household in this country over a period of 99 years

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The line graph illustrates the percentage of households with electrical appliances and number of hours per week, per household in this country over a period of 99 years Overall we can see in the chart. Washing machines, refrigerators, vacuum cleaners were all rising from 1920 to 2019. Refrigerators, vacuum cleaners increase faster than washing machines. In 1920, refrigerators were just 0 percent of households, the vacuum cleaner was 30 percent of households, while in 2019, they were increasing to 100 percent of households. About washing machines, it used to the highest percentage of households in 1920 with 40 percent however in 2019 it was just rising in nearly 30 percents The last line graph shows us that households per week are 50 hours per week. However, its decline to 10 hours per week in 2019 To sum up, the percentage of households with electrical appliances rose while the number of hours per week declined from 1920 to 2019
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IELTS academic The line graph illustrates the percentage of households with electrical appliances and number of hours per week, per household in this country over a period of 99 years

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