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The line graph illustrates the number of male and female Australians who smoke cigarettes. Overall, the figure of males was higher than the number of females, however, their difference decreased between 1960 and 2000.

The line graph illustrates the number of male and female Australians who smoke cigarettes. Overall, the figure of males was higher than the number of females, however, their difference decreased between 1960 and 2000. G9bNQ
1. The line graph illustrates the number of male and female Australians who smoke cigarettes. Overall, the figure of males was higher than the number of females, however, their difference decreased between 1960 and 2000. The number of male Australians who smoke was approximately 6 million in 1960, which reached the peak. But it dropped dramatically to over 4 million in 1980. The figure remained stable in the period from 1980 to 1985, however in the period from 1985 to 1995, the number dropped gradually to under 3 million by 1995. From 1995 to 2000, the figure had a slight rise. Turning to the female Australians, the number of them who smoke rose rapidly in the period from 1960 to 1975, and peaked at about 3. 5 million in 1975. However, the figure fell slowly in the period from 1975 to 2000, decreased to almost 2 million by 2000.
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The line graph illustrates the
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of male and female Australians who smoke cigarettes.
Overall
, the
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figure
of males was higher than the
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number
of females,
however
, their difference decreased between 1960 and 2000.

The
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of male Australians who smoke was approximately 6
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million
in 1960, which reached the peak.
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it dropped
dramatically
to over 4
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in 1980. The
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figure
remained stable in the
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period
from 1980 to 1985,
however
in the
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period
from 1985 to 1995, the
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dropped
gradually
to under 3
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million
by 1995. From 1995 to 2000, the
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had a slight rise.

Turning to the female Australians, the
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of them who smoke rose
rapidly
in the
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period
from 1960 to 1975, and peaked at about 3. 5
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million
in 1975.
However
, the
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fell
slowly
in the
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from 1975 to 2000, decreased to almost 2
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by 2000.
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IELTS academic The line graph illustrates the number of male and female Australians who smoke cigarettes. Overall, the figure of males was higher than the number of females, however, their difference decreased between 1960 and 2000.

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