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The line chart gives information about the Tourist Information Office receive the number of enquiries in one city over half of the year in 2011.

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The line chart gives information about the Tourist Information Office receive the number of enquiries in one city over half of the year in 2011. In general, the figure for the enquiries in person and by telephone fluctuated dramatically upturn over a six-month period. On the opposite, the enquiries by letter or email reduced moderately but stood at last month. The number of enquiries in person increased remarkably from over 400 to exactly 800 in the first two months, then more hugely in next month at about 1200. The June saw the number of enquiries still went up by more than 1000. In January, a downturn of 100 was shown in the enquiries by telephone, but later rised to 100 in February. After that, it unchanged until April. Ultimately, a quick growth was recorded in the number of enquiries by telephone then peaked to accurately 1400 in last 2-month period. On the other hand, there was a marginal fall in the figure of enquiries by letter or email in February and March, then more substantially from about 600 to below 400 in the next 2 months. Finally, the figure stabilized at approximately 400 in June.
The line chart gives information about the Tourist Information Office receive the
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enquiries
in one city over half of the year in 2011.

In general
, the figure for the
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enquiries
in person and by telephone fluctuated
dramatically
upturn over a six-month period. On the opposite, the
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enquiries
by letter or email
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reduced
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but
stood at last month.

The
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enquiries
in person increased
remarkably
from over 400 to exactly 800 in the
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two
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, then more
hugely
in
next
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at about 1200. The June
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saw
the
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still
went up by more than 1000.

In January, a downturn of 100
was shown
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enquiries
by telephone,
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later
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to 100 in February. After that,
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it
unchanged until April.
Ultimately
, a quick growth
was recorded
in the
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of
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enquiries
by telephone then peaked to
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1400 in last
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On the other hand
, there was a marginal fall in the figure of
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enquiries
by letter or email in February and March, then more
substantially
from about 600 to below 400 in the
next
2
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.
Finally
, the figure stabilized at approximately 400 in June.
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