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The line graph illustrates the number of Apple services sold over the world during the 11-year period time starting from 2002.

The line graph illustrates the number of Apple services sold over the world during the 11-year period time starting from 2002. paL6L

The line graph illustrates the number of Apple services sold over the world during the 11-year period time starting from 2002. Overall, it is clear that there was a significant increase in iPhone sales and this period witnessed a soar in iPod figure. The number of Macs was not sold well in the time from 2002 to 2004 but this figure experienced a modest jump to 20 million in 2012 and ending at the lowest figure in 2013. Similarly, the number of Mac sales was as equal as iPod figure but this figure remarkably went up in 2004 and read a plateau at well under 60 million in 2008. The year between 2008 and 2013 saw a fall in iPod consumption, which stood at the second rank among the three. In contrast, there was an appearance of the iPhone in 2007. This Apple service soared from 0 to 20 million in only 3 years. This figure continuously experienced a rocket of 130 million, which outstripped iPod sales and represented the first rank over the rest of the period.

The line graph illustrates the number of Apple services sold over the world during the 11-year period time starting from 2002.

Overall
, it is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :apparent
clear
 that there was a significant increase in iPhone sales and this period witnessed a soar in iPod figure.

The number of Macs was not sold well in the time from 2002 to 2004 This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 this You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpricecharacterratenumbersymbolamount
figure
 experienced a modest jump to 20 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withthousandtrillionmuchlottotalsum
million
 in 2012 and ending at the lowest You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpricecharacterratenumbersymbolamount
figure
 in 2013. Similarly
, the number of Mac sales was as equal as iPod You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpricecharacterratenumbersymbolamount
figure
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but
 this You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpricecharacterratenumbersymbolamount
figure
remarkably
 went up in 2004 and read a plateau at well under 60 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withthousandtrillionmuchlottotalsum
million
 in 2008.

The year between 2008 and 2013 This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
saw
 a fall in iPod consumption, which stood at the second rank among the three. In contrast
, there was an appearance of the iPhone in 2007. This Apple service soared from 0 to 20 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withthousandtrillionmuchlottotalsum
million
 in This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 3 years. This You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpricecharacterratenumbersymbolamount
figure
continuously
 experienced a rocket of 130 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withthousandtrillionmuchlottotalsum
million
, which outstripped iPod sales and represented the first
 rank over the rest of the period. 