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The line graph gives information about the usage of Facebook and Twitter in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph gives information about the usage of Facebook and Twitter in Australia. MMWBk
The line graph illustrates the use of two social networking platform such as Facebook and Twitter per person in a week in Australia. Overall, the most striking features of the graph is that, usage of Facebook can be seen in increasing trend whereas in Twitter fluctuation in the use can be observed throughout the period. Looking at the details, a person used Twitter less than 25 times per week in 2012 which has been declined to around 14 times in the next year Moreover, it can be observed that more than 10 times, user used Twitter in 2014 that had gradually increased to nearly 10 times and 35 times in 2015 and 2016 respectively. Considering the other factors, Facebook users use more than 20 times per week in 2012. Furthermore, slight increase (nearly 25 times) can be observed in the next year. In 2014, users use it for 30 times per day that raised to 31 times in the next year. Additionally, around 35 times a person operates Facebook in a week in 2016.
The line graph illustrates the
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of two social networking
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platform
such as Facebook and Twitter per person in a
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in Australia.

Overall
, the most striking features of the graph is that, usage of Facebook can be
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in increasing trend whereas
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in Twitter
fluctuation in the
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can
be observed
throughout the period.

Looking at the
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details
, a person
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used
Twitter less than 25
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times
per
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week
in 2012 which has
been declined
to around 14
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times
in the
next
year
Moreover
, it can
be observed
that more than 10
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, user
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used
Twitter in 2014 that had
gradually
increased to
nearly
10
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times
and 35
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times
in 2015 and 2016
respectively
.

Considering the other factors, Facebook users
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more than 20
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per
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week
in 2012.
Furthermore
, slight increase (
nearly
25
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times)
can
be observed
in the
next
year. In 2014, users
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it for 30
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times
per day that raised to 31
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times
in the
next
year.
Additionally
, around 35
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times
a person operates Facebook in a
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week
in 2016.
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IELTS academic The line graph gives information about the usage of Facebook and Twitter in Australia.

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6.0
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