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The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web. 2bQK6
The graph shows that using new music sites on the internet in 15 days period of time namely music choice and trendy pop parade. The overall trends shows fluctuation with slight increased towards the end of period. At the beginning music choice site has been visited by over 40, 000 people on first day, its been half of them in the next day. Whereas for pop parade site 120, 000 people has been visited on the first day and its been continued for next two days. While on 3rd day 60, 000 people visited personal choice site and again declined to 20, 000 people on the 4th day. on the 7th day the pop parade site is drastically reduced to around 30, 000 people for the visit of site. On the other hand music choice is remain same at 20, 000 people for visit of site with some fluctuation. Pop parade site is rapidly increased on an over 1. 5 million people for the visit of site on the 11th day, whereas for music choice 0. 3 million people visited and on the next day it has been increased to 1. 2 million people, whereas for pop parade gradually decline to 0. 9 million people On the 15th day of the website visit music choice decline to 0. 7 million with fluctuation and pop parade increased further more increased up to 1. 70 million with fluctuation.
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music
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choice
and trendy pop
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parade
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shows
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with slight
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increased
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end
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At the beginning
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music
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choice
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site
has been
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visited
by over 40, 000
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people
on
first
day,
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been half of them in the
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parade
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site
120, 000
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people
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been continued
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two days. While on 3rd day 60, 000
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people
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visited
personal
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choice
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site
and again declined to 20, 000
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on the 4th day.
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parade
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site
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site
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people
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. Pop
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parade
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rapidly
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million
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on the 11th day, whereas for
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music
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choice
0. 3
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parade
gradually
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million
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On the 15th day of the website
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music
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choice
decline to 0. 7
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million
with
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and pop
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parade
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increased
further
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up to 1. 70
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IELTS academic The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web.

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