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The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009. KPlM
The line graph illustrates the enrollment of international students from 3 different countries(Iran, Greece, and Turkey) to Sheffield University from the year 2005 to the year 2009. Overall, majority of students were from Iran and turkey whereas total number of greek students had a plummet at the end of the period. To begin with, students from turkey is less than a quarter in the year 2005 which soared to about 90 exceeding Iran a year later. it increased to about 100 number pupils in the year 2009. Furthermore, the country Iran had a spike from 20 to more than 60 in the later period outracing Greece and Italy. On the other hand, 180 students from Greece had enrolled in the year 2005 and the number decreased to 60. There was a plateau of 6060 students in a period of an year and again it had a fall to nearly 40 in the year 2009. comparatively, by the given data, Iranian pupils are more interested in the Sheffield university which had steadily inclined towards 160. in contrast, greek had very lowest rate of enrolment compared to the year 2005.
The line graph illustrates the enrollment of international
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2005 to the
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2005 which soared to about 90 exceeding Iran a
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increased to about 100 number pupils in the
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2009.
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, the country Iran had a spike from 20 to more than 60 in the later period outracing Greece and Italy.
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from Greece had enrolled in the
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2005 and the number decreased to 60. There was a plateau of 6060
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data, Iranian pupils are more interested in the Sheffield university which had
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