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he graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

he graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. WrG5
The presented graphs illustrate the data of people owning a computer and its relation to the user’s level of education between 2002 and 2010. As is observed, the percentage of computer ownerships were gradually increased throughout eight years and it was mostly owned by the higher education levels. Looking at the first graph more closely, in 2002, merely 60% of people had a computer. Consequently, the sequential rise of computer ownership was detected in 2004 for about 60%, approximately about 5% improvement. In 2008, an upward trend reached into nearly 70% before it reached the peak at almost 80% in 2010. In accordance to the percentage of ownership, in fact, the lower education the society got, the lower percentage presented. The lowest percentage was gained by people who did not finish their high school education. However, there was a clear rise from about 15% in 2002 to 40% in 2010. It followed by the high school graduates in the second place with nearly 40% and 70% from 2002 to 2010 respectively. In contrast, although postgraduate degree remained had a great percentage merely 70% in 2002, it scored over 90% in 2010 by 20% leap.
The presented graphs illustrate the data of
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owning a computer and its relation to the user’s level of
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education
between 2002 and 2010. As
is observed
, the
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percentage
of computer
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ownerships
were
gradually
increased throughout eight years and it was
mostly
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owned
by the higher
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education
levels.

Looking at the
first
graph more
closely
, in 2002,
merely
60% of
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people
had a computer.
Consequently
, the sequential rise of computer ownership
was detected
in 2004 for about 60%, approximately about 5% improvement. In 2008, an upward trend reached into
nearly
70%
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before
it reached the peak at almost 80% in 2010.

In accordance to the
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percentage
of ownership, in fact, the lower
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education
the society
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got
, the lower
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percentage
presented. The lowest
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percentage
was gained
by
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people
who did not finish their high school
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education
.
However
, there was a
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clear
rise from about 15% in 2002 to 40% in 2010. It followed by the high school graduates in the second place with
nearly
40% and 70% from 2002 to 2010
respectively
.
In contrast
, although postgraduate degree remained had a great
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percentage
merely
70% in 2002, it scored over 90% in 2010 by 20% leap.
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IELTS academic he graphs above give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.

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