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The line graph gives information about the average annual expenditure on cell phone and residential services between 2001 to 2010.

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The line graph gives information about the average annual expenditure on cell phone and residential services between 2001 to 2010. The first thing to note is that there was a dramatical increase in the services of cell phones over the period under study, meanwhile there was a noticable decrease in the residential phone service from 700$ to 400$ during this time under study. More specifically, in 2001, cell phone services was 200$ this figures increasd slightly till 2003 after this year the increase was stable till 2007 then there was a fluctuation up to 2008 and then it rose up to 800$ in 2010. In contrast in 2001 the residential phone services was at the peak by seven hundred dollars after 2009 this figures change to 400$. From the given data we can conclude that the cell phone services figures increased dramatically while the residential phone services decreased over the aforementioned period.
The line graph gives information about the average annual expenditure on
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dramatical
increase in the
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over the period under study, meanwhile there was a
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noticable
decrease in the
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residential
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phone
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from
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700$
to
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400$
during this time under study.

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specifically
, in 2001,
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was
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200$
this figures
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increasd
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till 2003 after this year the increase was stable till 2007 then there was a fluctuation up to 2008 and then it rose up to
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800$
in 2010. In
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contrast
in 2001 the
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was at the peak by seven hundred dollars after 2009 this figures
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The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "$400".
400$
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From the
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data we can conclude that the
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figures increased
dramatically
while the
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residential
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phone
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decreased over the aforementioned period.

IELTS academic The line graph gives information about the average annual expenditure on cell phone and residential services between 2001 to 2010.

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