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The bar chart illustrate the earning of one country's exports in five different categories in the years 2015 and 2016. While the table gives information on the proportion change in each exported product in 2015 to 2016

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The bar chart illustrate the earning of one country's exports in five different categories in the years 2015 and 2016. While the table gives information on the proportion change in each exported product in 2015 to 2016. The petroleum products and Engineered goods were the two most profitable exports in both year. Their values were around 61% and 57% respectively. In the year 2016, they both rose up to approximately 62%. Besides, the export of Agricultural products and Textiles were also both went up, to practically 31%. However, Gems and Jewellery was the only sector that the export value dropped from roughly 44% to 41%. The percentage change in the export value of Textiles from 2015 to 2016 was greatest, at 15. 24%. This was followed by Engineered goods and Petroleum products whose export value grown at 8. 5% and 3% respectivy. But for Agricultural products showed the smallest change in the export profit with 0. 81%. In contrast, Gems and jewellery was the only category of products that saw a downward change in export earning, it's value fell by 5. 18%. Generally, export earnings of all the categories in the chart export increased except Gems and Jewellery. In addition, Textiles showed the biggest proportion in values elevate in that year.
The bar chart illustrate the earning of one country's
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in five
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different
categories in the years 2015 and 2016.
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the table gives information on the proportion
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change
in each exported
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product
in 2015 to 2016.

The petroleum
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products
and Engineered
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goods
were the two most profitable
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exports
in both
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year
. Their values were around 61% and 57%
respectively
. In the
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year
2016, they both rose up to approximately 62%.
Besides
, the
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export
of Agricultural
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products
and Textiles were
also
both went up, to
practically
31%.
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, Gems and
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Jewellery
was the
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only
sector that the
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export
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value
dropped from roughly 44% to 41%.

The percentage
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change
in the
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export
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value
of Textiles from 2015 to 2016 was greatest, at 15. 24%. This
was followed
by Engineered
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goods
and Petroleum
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products
whose
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export
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grown at 8. 5% and 3%
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for Agricultural
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showed
the smallest
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change
in the
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export
profit with 0. 81%.
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, Gems and
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jewellery
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category of
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that
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a downward
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in
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earning, it's
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fell by 5. 18%.

Generally
,
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export
earnings of all the categories in the chart
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export
increased except Gems and
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Jewellery
.
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, Textiles
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the biggest proportion in values elevate in that
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.

IELTS academic The bar chart illustrate the earning of one country's exports in five different categories in the years 2015 and 2016. While the table gives information on the proportion change in each exported product in 2015 to 2016

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