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The line graph gives information about from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in USA since 1980 with projections until 2030

The line graph gives information about from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in USA since 1980 with projections until 2030 MO2N
The line graph illustrates the information about survey conducted fo the utilization of energy in the America since 1980 and also projections till 2030. To commence, in 1980, consumption of power produced by the petrol and oil was about 35 quadrillion units. but it was decreased dramatically until 1995. After that, it experienced highly increase till 2020. Whilst, it probably would reach at peak point in 2030. However, 50 quadrillion units was noticed to be in 1980 by the coal. Thereafter, it would highly increase in last year. Whereas, utility of power was very less in 1985 and it increase slowly till 2015. On the contrast, after that it remains stable in the future. Probing ahead, utilization of energy was seen last difference generated by nuclear till 2005. After that it would be remain stable until 2030. However, in 1980, the consumption of solar energy was around 4 quadrillion units and it decline proportion can be seen in the figure. Whereas, individuals use hydropower in 1980 was very less and it decreased drastically until 2010. but it estimated that remains stable in the 2030. Overall it is crystal clear that maximum number of energy was consumption in the petrol and oil. Whereas, hydropower consume very less energy in the USA throughout the period.
The line graph illustrates the information about survey conducted
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the utilization of
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in the America since 1980 and
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projections till 2030. To commence, in 1980, consumption of power produced by the petrol and oil was about 35 quadrillion units.
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highly
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less in 1985 and it
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energy
was
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last difference generated by nuclear till 2005. After that it would be
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energy
was around 4 quadrillion units and it
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decline
proportion can be
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seen
in the figure. Whereas, individuals
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hydropower in 1980 was
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less and it decreased
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it estimated that remains stable in the 2030.
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that maximum number of
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was consumption in the petrol and oil. Whereas, hydropower consume
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very
less
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energy
in the USA throughout the period.
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IELTS academic The line graph gives information about from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in USA since 1980 with projections until 2030

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