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The chart shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia, and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.

The chart shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia, and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999. akpo
The Bar chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who help them in 1999. The bar chart illustrates data about the proportion of people (male and female) who got variety degrees of post-school qualifications (Skilled Vocational Diploma, Undergraduated Diploma, Bachelor's Degree, Postgraduate diploma and Masters Degree) in Australia in 1999. Overall, it can be seen that both of the highest and lowest percentages of qualified males and females were indicated in the Skilled Vocational Diploma. Furthermore, other types of diploma and degrees highlighted fluctuations in the whole period given. The percentage of qualified males dominated with 90% in Skilled Vocational Diploma for the duration of first year, whereas the rates females demonstrated exactly 10%. Both of men and women remained differently in the Post graduate Diploma (70% and 30% respectively). In the Masters degree, males occupied 60 % which was 20% higher as compared to females. Interms of Undergraduate Diploma, females depicted twice smaller rather than females(35% and 70% respectively). A similar growth in Bachelor's Degree was evident reaching 50 % for women and about 45% for men.
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levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of
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them in 1999.

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people
(male and
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female)
who
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variety
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degrees
of post-school qualifications (Skilled Vocational
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Diploma
,
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Undergraduated
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Diploma
, Bachelor's
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Degree
, Postgraduate
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diploma
and
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Masters
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Degree)
in Australia in 1999.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
that both of the highest and lowest percentages of qualified
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males
and
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females
were indicated
in the Skilled Vocational
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Diploma
.
Furthermore
, other types of
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diploma
and
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degrees
highlighted fluctuations in the whole period
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given
.

The percentage of qualified
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males
dominated with 90% in Skilled Vocational
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Diploma
for the duration of
first
year, whereas the rates
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females
demonstrated exactly 10%. Both of
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men
and women remained
differently
in the Post graduate
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Diploma
(70% and 30%
respectively
). In the
For an academic degree, use "Master’s".
Masters
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degree
,
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males
occupied 60 % which was 20% higher
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as
compared to females.

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Interms
of Undergraduate
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Diploma
,
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females
depicted twice smaller
rather
than
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females(35%
and 70%
respectively
). A similar growth in Bachelor's
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Degree
was evident reaching 50 % for women and about 45% for
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men
.
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