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Compare the graph below, which shows the average annual expenditures on smartphones and traditional phones in America from 2000 to 2009.

Compare the graph below, which shows the average annual expenditures on smartphones and traditional phones in America from 2000 to 2009. jb8yX
The line graph compares average yearly spending by Americans on smartphones and traditional phones between 2000 and 2009. It is clear that spending on traditional phones fell steadily over the 10-year period, while smartphone expenditure rose quickly. The year 2005 marks the point at which expenditure on smartphones overtook that for traditional phones. In 2000, US consumers spent an average of nearly $700 on mobile phones, compared to only around $200 on smartphones. Over the following five years, average yearly spending on traditional phones dropped steadily by nearly $200. By contrast, expenditure on smartphones rose quickly by approximately $300. Compare the following In the year 2005, the average American paid out the same amount of money on both types of phones, spending just over $500 on each. In 2009, expenditure on smartphones reached a peak of around $750. By contrast, the figure for spending on traditional phones fell to just over half this amount, below $400.
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between 2000 and 2009.

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around $200 on smartphones.
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IELTS academic Compare the graph below, which shows the average annual expenditures on smartphones and traditional phones in America from 2000 to 2009.

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