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The line graph enlighten on thousand people including male and female about the rates of smoking in someland of four decades from 1960 through 2000 From the line graph, male which indicates that, in 1960 their ratio was very low at that time.

The line graph enlighten on thousand people including male and female about the rates of smoking in someland of four decades from 1960 through 2000 From the line graph, male which indicates that, in 1960 their ratio was very low at that time. Kw0d3
The line graph enlighten on thousand people including male and female about the rates of smoking in someland of four decades from 1960 through 2000 From the line graph, male which indicates that, in 1960 their ratio was very low at that time. Which was only 500 per 1000 people. As years passed there was rapidly increased in 1965 and stabilize during 5 years at number of 180. Again till 1975 it rose year by year. In 1980 to 1990 for one decade it would be stable at 200 people. Interestingly females consumers were decreased by 2000. The male consumer was the highest at 600 in number at 1960. Years of two decades it displayed decreasing amount of tobaccu consumer. It was rapidly decrease the male consumer till 2000. In 2000, the man ratio almost half than male per 1000 people. To overall, it has been observed that male smokers rate were changed after four decades. And female shows the various ups as well as down in number whivh was high tan initial data
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of four decades from 1960 through 2000 From the line graph, male which indicates that, in 1960 their ratio was
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500 per 1000
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people
. As years passed there was
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increased in 1965 and stabilize during 5 years at number of 180. Again till 1975 it rose
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. In 1980 to 1990 for one decade it would be stable at 200
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people
.
Interestingly
females
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were decreased
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consumer
was the highest at 600 in number at 1960. Years of two decades it displayed decreasing amount of
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tobaccu
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consumer
. It was
rapidly
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the male
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consumer
till 2000. In 2000, the
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ratio almost half than male per 1000
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people
. To
overall
, it has
been observed
that male smokers rate were
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changed
after four decades. And female
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the various ups
as well
as down in number
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whivh
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IELTS academic The line graph enlighten on thousand people including male and female about the rates of smoking in someland of four decades from 1960 through 2000 From the line graph, male which indicates that, in 1960 their ratio was very low at that time.

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