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The line graph demonstrates the rate of income gained by four restaurants including Delicacy, Evening Paradise, Grand Fiesta and Spice Fortune. In general, most restaurants witnessed an upward trend in the rate of earnings at the end of the year, except for Spice Fortune.

The line graph demonstrates the rate of income gained by four restaurants including Delicacy, Evening Paradise, Grand Fiesta and Spice Fortune. In general, most restaurants witnessed an upward trend in the rate of earnings at the end of the year, except for Spice Fortune. Kybe0
In detail, Grand Fiesta, despite a gradual fall from 100 thousand to under 80 thousand dollars for the first six months, steadily grew until November and hit a high of nearly 140 thousand in December. By comparison, Evening Paradise and Delicacy followed quite the same pattern of changes although the former always surpassed the latter in the amount of revenue over the months. Specifically, in spite of their both significant fluctuations for the first ten months, the former soared to a high of around 180 thousand dollars whereas the latter surged to a peak of 120 thousand dollars in the final month. Unlike other restaurants, Spice Fortune was the only that revealed downward fluctuations from the highest point of approximately 180 thousand in February to the lowest point of about 50 thousand in December. Strikingly, in the middle of October, most restaurants shared the equal revenues, except Delicacy
In detail, Grand Fiesta, despite a gradual fall from 100 thousand to under 80 thousand dollars for the
first
six months,
steadily
grew until November and hit a high of
nearly
140 thousand in December. By comparison, Evening Paradise and Delicacy followed quite the same pattern of
changes
although the former always surpassed the latter in the amount of revenue over the months.
Specifically
,
in spite of
their both significant fluctuations for the
first
ten months, the former soared to a high of around 180 thousand dollars whereas the latter surged to a peak of 120 thousand dollars in the final month.

Unlike other restaurants, Spice Fortune was the
only
that revealed downward fluctuations from the highest point of approximately 180 thousand in February to the lowest point of about 50 thousand in December.
Strikingly
, in the middle of October, most restaurants shared the equal revenues, except Delicacy

IELTS academic The line graph demonstrates the rate of income gained by four restaurants including Delicacy, Evening Paradise, Grand Fiesta and Spice Fortune. In general, most restaurants witnessed an upward trend in the rate of earnings at the end of the year, except for Spice Fortune.

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