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The line graph demonstrated three company's progression of waste product within 15 years (from 2000 to 2015).

The line graph demonstrated three company's progression of waste product within 15 years (from 2000 to 2015). obbVB
The line graph demonstrated three company's progression of waste product within 15 years (from 2000 to 2015). For the whole context, there were three industries, the vertical axis showed the waste in tones unit, the horizontal axis showed four time points, which can be divided into three time periods: the first (2000-2005), the second (2005-2010), the third (2010-2015). Additionally, there were two tendencies of development: decrease (company A and B) and increase (company C). For detailed, in the first period, company B and C rose steadily (from 8-10, 4-6 tones, respectively), in reverse with company A (from 12-11 tones). In the second period, there was a twist fall of company B and a continuous decrease of company A (from 10-7, 11-9 tones). On the other hand, company C still kept its rise slightly, from 6-7 tones. In the third period, company C rocketed to 10 tones, while the others dropped to 8 (company A) and 3 (company B) tones, respectively. Conclusion, two out of three companies did have a falling tendency within 15 years, especially with company B that had a fast and stiff low swing. Next is company A with a slower falling rate and finally company C that had a worriedly rising generated waste. Nevertheless, it may due to the development of the company that caused the changing in waste production. With company C may be elevating by prosperity, whereas the others were might "bankrupting".
The line graph demonstrated three
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company's
progression of
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waste
product within 15 years (from 2000 to 2015).

For the whole context, there were three industries,

the vertical axis
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showed
the
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waste
in
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tones
unit, the horizontal axis
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showed
four time points, which can
be divided
into three time
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periods
: the
first
(2000-2005), the second (2005-2010), the third (2010-2015).
Additionally
, there were two tendencies of development: decrease (
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company
A and B) and increase (
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company
C).

For detailed, in the
first
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period
,
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company
B and C rose
steadily
(from 8-10, 4-6
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tones
,
respectively
), in reverse with
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company
A (from 12-11
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tones)
. In the second
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period
, there was a twist fall of
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company
B and a continuous decrease of
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company
A (from 10-7, 11-9
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tones)
.
On the other hand
,
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company
C
still
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kept
its rise
slightly
, from 6-7
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tones
. In the third
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period
,
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company
C rocketed to 10
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tones
, while the others dropped to 8 (
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company
A) and 3 (
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company
B)
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tones
,
respectively
.

Conclusion, two out of three
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companies
did have a falling tendency within 15 years,
especially
with
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company
B that had a
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fast
and stiff low swing.
Next
is
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company
A with a slower falling rate and
finally
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company
C that had a
worriedly
rising generated
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waste
.
Nevertheless
, it may due to the development of the
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company
that caused the changing in
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waste
production. With
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company
C may be elevating by prosperity, whereas the others were might
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bankrupting
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.
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IELTS academic The line graph demonstrated three company's progression of waste product within 15 years (from 2000 to 2015).

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