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The bar chart illustrate the rate of regular consumption of fast food by people in the USA through the years 2003, 2006 and 2013.

The bar chart illustrate the rate of regular consumption of fast food by people in the USA through the years 2003, 2006 and 2013. Rww5V
The bar chart illustrate the rate of regular consumption of fast food by people in the USA through the years 2003, 2006 and 2013. Overall, while the proportion of people used fast food in once a week and once or twice month was highest, the figure for people used one in every day was lowest. From 2003 to 2006, at 25% and over 30% of total people ate at fast food restaurants in once a week and once or twice a month, approximately doubling the rate of people in two groups which is several time a week and a few times a years, under 20% and 15% respectively. Meanwhile, the figure for people chose takeaway stores in every day and never had a similar rate, under 5%. In 2013, a vast majority of people, about 33%, chose unhealthy food restaurants at once or twice a month, compare to the remaining frequency of use. In contrast, the rate of people in several times a week and a few times a year groups were similarly sharp decrease, about 15%. Finally, the percentage of people in a daily basis day and never group remained unchanged, under 5%.
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in the USA through the years 2003, 2006 and 2013.

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restaurants in
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chose takeaway stores in every day and never had a similar
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, under 5%.

In 2013, a vast majority of
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, about 33%, chose unhealthy
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a year groups were
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in a daily basis day and never group remained unchanged, under 5%.
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IELTS academic The bar chart illustrate the rate of regular consumption of fast food by people in the USA through the years 2003, 2006 and 2013.

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