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The line graph demonstrated how 3 spreads were consumpted between 1981 and 2007.

The line graph demonstrated how 3 spreads were consumpted between 1981 and 2007. d30E6
The line graph demonstrated how 3 spreads were consumpted between 1981 and 2007. Overall, at first butter was the most picked spread out of three, after which low fat and reduced spreads became popular and took the butter's place. In 1981, consumers prefered using butter with bread, which made 140 grams of this substance sold out. The figure even culminated at nearly 160 grams in 1986, after which fell down dramatically at approximately 50 gram in 2007. In contrast, low fat and reduced spreads, which were only invented in 1996, started with a low amount of consumtion being 10 grams. In the next 11 years, it soaked up to the peak of around 80 grams and then went down slightly at nearly 70 grams. With regard to margarine, the figure started at around 90 grams, after which fluctuated and finally droped at 40 grams in 2007.
The line graph demonstrated how 3
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consumpted
between 1981 and 2007.

Overall
, at
first
butter was the most picked
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spread
out of three, after which low
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fat
and
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reduced
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spreads
became popular and took the butter's place.

In 1981, consumers
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prefered
using butter with bread, which made 140
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grams
of this substance sold out. The figure even culminated at
nearly
160
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grams
in 1986, after which fell down
dramatically
at approximately 50
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gram
in 2007.

In contrast
, low
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fat
and
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reduced
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spreads
, which were
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only
invented in 1996,
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started
with a low amount of
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consumtion
being 10
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grams
. In the
next
11 years, it soaked up to the peak of around 80
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grams
and then went down
slightly
at
nearly
70 grams.

With regard to margarine, the figure
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started
at around 90
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grams
, after which fluctuated and
finally
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droped
at 40
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grams
in 2007.
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