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The line graph below shows the percentage of car owners in Asia and Europe from 1950 to 2010.

The line graph below shows the percentage of car owners in Asia and Europe from 1950 to 2010. DYjMA
The graph presents the proportion of people who owned cars in two continents including Asia and Europe over a period of 60 years between 1950 and 2010. Overall, over the period the percentage of car owners in Asia increased steadily, whereas that in Europe first rose and then fell considerably after 1970. It can be seen that, at the beginning of the period, the rate of car ownership in Europe was far higher than that in Asia. Specifically, the proportion of European people who owned cars stood at 10% in 1950 and this figure grew slightly to 11% in 1960. From then on (onwards), it continued to go up sharply and reached a peak of 22% in 1970 before falling significantly to just 14% in 2000. From this year to 2010, the rate of European car owners remained stable at this figure. In contrast, the car ownership in Asia showed a different trend over the period. To be specific, starting at 5% in 1950, the proportion of Asian car owners levelled off at this rate until 1970. After that, the figure increased considerably to 14% in 1990 and it continued to rise steadily to reach 16% in 2010. In this year, it is noteworthy that the percentage of car ownership in Asia surpassed (exceeded/ overtook) that in Europe by 2%.
The graph presents the proportion of
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in two continents including Asia and Europe over a
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of 60 years between 1950 and 2010.
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, over the
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period
the percentage of
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owners in Asia increased
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, whereas that in Europe
first
rose and then fell
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after 1970.

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that, at the beginning of the
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, the rate of
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ownership in Europe was far higher than that in Asia.
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, the proportion of European
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who
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stood at 10% in 1950 and this figure grew
slightly
to 11% in 1960. From then on (onwards), it continued to go up
sharply
and reached a peak of 22% in 1970
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before
falling
significantly
to
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14% in 2000. From this year to 2010, the rate of European
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car
owners remained stable at this figure.

In contrast
, the
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ownership in Asia
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trend over the
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period
. To be specific, starting at 5% in 1950, the proportion of Asian
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car
owners levelled off at this rate until 1970. After that, the figure increased
considerably
to 14% in 1990 and it continued to rise
steadily
to reach 16% in 2010. In this year, it is noteworthy that the percentage of
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car
ownership in Asia surpassed (exceeded/ overtook) that in Europe by 2%.
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IELTS academic The line graph below shows the percentage of car owners in Asia and Europe from 1950 to 2010.

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