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The line graph below shows the number of visitors to 3 London Museums between June and September in 2013.

The line graph below shows the number of visitors to 3 London Museums between June and September in 2013. K3PgN
The given graph depicts the quantity of tourists going to 3 different museums in London from June to September in 2013. Overall, while the number of visitors to Natural History Museum declined, the opposite was true for the other 2 museums. It is evident that an overwhelming majority of people chose to arrive at British Museum over the period shown. In June, about 600 thousand visitors travelled to British Museum, followed by Natural History Museum and Science Museum, with visitor figures at 550 thousand and 400 thousand respectively. After 2 months, both the statistics of Science Museum and Natural History Museum experienced a considerable drop to about 380, 000 and 300, 000. Also, the figures for British Museum bottomed at 500 thousand in August despite peaking at 750 thousand in July. The period from August to September witnessed the same upward trend again of 150 thousand tourists in Science Museum and British Museum. Meanwhile, the number of visitors to Natural History Museum just increased to 100 thousand at the end of the period.
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graph depicts the quantity of tourists going to 3
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museums
in London from June to September in 2013.

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, while the number of
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visitors
to
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Natural
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History
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Museum
declined, the opposite was true for the other 2
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museums
. It is evident that an overwhelming majority of
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people
chose to arrive at British
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Museum
over the period shown.

In June, about 600 thousand
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visitors
travelled to British
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Museum
, followed by
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Natural
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History
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Museum
and Science
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Museum
, with
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visitor
figures at 550 thousand and 400 thousand
respectively
. After 2 months, both the statistics of Science
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and
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Natural
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History
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Museum
experienced a considerable drop to about 380, 000 and 300, 000.
Also
, the figures for British
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Museum
bottomed at 500 thousand in August despite peaking at 750 thousand in July.

The period from August to September witnessed the same upward trend again of 150 thousand tourists in Science
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Museum
and British
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Museum
. Meanwhile, the number of
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visitors
to
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Natural
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History
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Museum
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increased to 100 thousand at the
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end
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IELTS academic The line graph below shows the number of visitors to 3 London Museums between June and September in 2013.

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