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The given line graph presents information about the sale of gold in Dubai during 2002 year.

The given line graph presents information about the sale of gold in Dubai during 2002 year. lqmrb
The given line graph presents information about the sale of gold in Dubai during 2002 year. Units are measured in millions of Dirhams and data was shown in months. As a general trend, in March the sales of Gold hit the peak while the lowest point was observed between July and September. At the beginning of the months, clearly from January to March the trade has experienced noticeable increase to reach 350 million of Dirhams. However the sale had fallen considerably in July to a little more than 100, when the figures fluctuated during the three months (August-October) which levellwd out just under 200 in October. After the following month the given data maintained the same level over the next 2 months (November, December) at the end of the year which stabilized at almost 200.
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line graph presents information about the sale of gold in Dubai during 2002 year. Units
are measured
in millions of
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Dirhams
and data
was shown
in
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months
. As a general trend, in March the sales of Gold hit the peak while the lowest point
was observed
between July and September. At the beginning of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
months
,
clearly
from January to March the trade has experienced noticeable increase to reach 350 million of
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Dirhams
.
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However
the sale had fallen
considerably
in July to a
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little
more than 100, when the figures fluctuated during the three
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months
(August-October) which
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levellwd
out
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just
under 200 in October. After the following
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month
the
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given
data maintained the same level over the
next
2
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months
(November, December) at the
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end
of the year which stabilized at almost 200.
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IELTS academic The given line graph presents information about the sale of gold in Dubai during 2002 year.

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  American English
1 paragraphs
135 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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