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The graph shows average amount of commuters in the UK by car,bus,train of between 1970 to 2030

The graph shows average amount of commuters in the UK by car, bus, train of between 1970 to 2030 o57Qb
The line graph illustrates data on amount of England commuters travelling every day by three transports from 1970 to 2030. Overall although both car and train displayed increases over the period, bus witnessed a steady downword trend In 1970 the rates of car and train were nearly 5. 7 and 2. 7 millions respectively. Whereas, these two types of transports experienced show growth between 1970 and 1980, the number of computers who foney travalling all around the Great Britain rose sharply until 2000. The proportion of vehicles stood same with about 7 millions, while the rank of the trains that can include large amount of individuals, remained unchanged during the next 10 years with 3 millions. However, they have been climbing since 2010 and will prolong to reach the top till the end of the period. Besides, bus delivered similar number of commuters in the UK with approximately 4. 2 millions within first-ten years. But, the rank of busses has been decreasing too and it will fall to 3 millions in 2030.
The line graph illustrates data on amount of England commuters travelling every day by three transports from 1970 to 2030.

Overall
although both car and train displayed increases over the period, bus witnessed a steady
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downword
trend

In 1970 the rates of car and train were
nearly
5. 7 and 2. 7
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millions
respectively
. Whereas, these two types of transports experienced
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show
growth between 1970 and 1980, the number of computers who
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foney
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travalling
all around the Great Britain rose
sharply
until 2000. The proportion of vehicles stood same with about 7
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
millions
, while the rank of the trains that can include large amount of individuals, remained unchanged during the
next
10 years with 3
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millions
.
However
, they have been climbing since 2010 and will prolong to reach the top till the
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end
of the period.
Besides
, bus delivered similar number of commuters in the UK with approximately 4. 2
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millions
within
first
-ten years.
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But
, the rank of busses has been decreasing too and it will fall to 3
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millions
in 2030.
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IELTS academic The graph shows average amount of commuters in the UK by car, bus, train of between 1970 to 2030

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