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The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from.

The line graph and table below are representing the data about the number of tourists visiting Australia between 1975 to 2005, and which country they are specifically coming from in numbers, respectively. To start with the graph, the x-axis is showing the period time which is divided into three decades from 1975 to 2005, 1985 to 1995, and 1995 to 2005 and Also the number of foreign visitors in million is shown by y-axis. It’s obviously understandable that the number of visitors has grown at the end of every ten years period but the line slope in second decade is showing the tourist was much more eager to visit Australia than the other two decades. On the other side, the table is giving exact details of visitors’ origin country which they are coming from in 1975 and 2005. As it is illustrated, Japan has the most visitors in both 1975 and 2005 besides this country has the highest growth between the first and the last year of this research and also China has the minimum number of visitors. To summarize the whole research, Australia’s capability of hosting tourist has significantly increased.
The line graph and table below are representing the data about the
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number
of tourists visiting Australia
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between 1975 to 2005
, and which country they are
specifically
coming from in
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numbers
,
respectively
.

To
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start
with the graph, the x-axis is showing the period time which
is divided
into three decades from 1975 to 2005, 1985 to 1995, and 1995 to 2005 and
Also
the
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number
of foreign
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visitors
in
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million
is shown
by y-axis. It’s
obviously
understandable that the
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number
of
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visitors
has grown at the
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end
of every ten years period
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but
the line slope in second decade is showing the tourist was much more eager to visit Australia than the other two decades.

On the other side, the table is giving exact
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details
of
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visitors’
origin country which they are coming from in 1975 and 2005. As it
is illustrated
, Japan has the most
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visitors
in both 1975 and 2005
besides
this country has the highest growth between the
first
and the last year of this research and
also
China has the minimum
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number
of
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visitors
.
To summarize
the whole research, Australia’s capability of hosting tourist has
significantly
increased.
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IELTS academic The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from.

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