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The line graph below shows quantity of exports in various categories in 2015 and 2016

The line graph below shows quantity of exports in various categories in 2015 and 2016 m3DGn
The bar graph compares the data about percentage of exports in 5 different categories in 2015 and 2016. These indexes were meant degree of a country. Overall, it can be concluded from the given graph that much money were provided by two categories (petroleum products and engineered goods. However, index of textiles is considerably smaller than other fields. In terms of petroleum, it was the biggest over the given. The indexes are nearly the same level in 2015 and 2016. It was around 63 billion dollars. The second export's index was observed on engineered goods. However, this subject was reached to rise from 55 billion to 61 billion. On the other hand, money of exports consisted of small index on 3 major. In the field of gems and jewellary was 42 billion in 2015. However, it was declined significantly to 40 billion. According to agricultural products, it achieved to higher number than 2015. It changed to 37 billion from 32 billion. The smallest index was observed on textiles, but it also improved by 5 billion.
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categories in 2015 and 2016. These
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were meant
degree of a country.

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, it can
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graph that much money
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by two categories
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petroleum products and engineered
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goods
.
However
,
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index
of textiles is
considerably
smaller than other fields.

In terms of petroleum, it was the biggest over the
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given
. The
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indexes
are
nearly
the same level in 2015 and 2016. It was around 63
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billion
dollars. The second export's
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index
was observed
on engineered
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goods
.
However
, this subject
was reached
to rise from 55
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billion
to 61 billion.

On the other hand
, money of exports consisted of
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small
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index
on 3 major. In the field of gems and
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jewellary
was 42
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billion
in 2015.
However
, it
was declined
significantly
to 40
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billion
. According to agricultural products, it achieved to higher number than 2015. It
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changed
to 37
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billion
from 32
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billion
. The smallest
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index
was observed
on textiles,
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but
it
also
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improved
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