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The line graph below shows changes in fast food consumed in the UK between 1970and 1990

The line graph below shows changes in fast food consumed in the UK between 1970and 1990 Kwj16

The line graph illustrates in fast food consumed In the UK from 1970 to 1990. Overall, it is noticeable that fish& chips and Hamburger stood almost the same but Fish & chips more higher then others. To begin Hamburger stood at 0 in 1970. And it started to rise till 1990 (300). Fish & Chips stood at approximately 70 in 1970. After 10 period of years it dropped sharply from 1970 to 1990. And last one is Pizza was 300 and was higher result than others. But it declined year by year especially between 1970 and 1980. In addition from 1980 and 1990 there wasn't any changes to Pizza.

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 food consumed In the UK from 1970 to 1990. Overall
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 chips and Hamburger stood almost the same This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 Fish & chips more Did you mean "higher than"?higher than
higher then
 others. To This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiatecommence
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 Hamburger stood at 0 in 1970. And it This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiated
started
 to rise till 1990 (300). Fish & Chips stood at approximately 70 in 1970. “After” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
After
 10 period of years it dropped sharply
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But
 it declined year by year especially
 between 1970 and 1980. In Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?addition,
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Nonstandard phrase. Did you mean: "from 1980 to 1990"?from 1980 to 1990
from 1980 and 1990
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changes
 to Pizza. 

IELTS academic The line graph below shows changes in fast food consumed in the UK between 1970and 1990

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American English

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

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Lexical Resource: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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