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The line graph below shows changes in fast food consumed in the UK between 1970and 1990

The line graph below shows changes in fast food consumed in the UK between 1970and 1990 Kwj16
The line graph illustrates in fast food consumed In the UK from 1970 to 1990. Overall, it is noticeable that fish& chips and Hamburger stood almost the same but Fish & chips more higher then others. To begin Hamburger stood at 0 in 1970. And it started to rise till 1990 (300). Fish & Chips stood at approximately 70 in 1970. After 10 period of years it dropped sharply from 1970 to 1990. And last one is Pizza was 300 and was higher result than others. But it declined year by year especially between 1970 and 1980. In addition from 1980 and 1990 there wasn't any changes to Pizza.
The line graph illustrates in
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food consumed In the UK from 1970 to 1990.
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, it is noticeable that
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fish&
chips and Hamburger stood almost the same
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Fish & chips more
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higher then
others. To
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begin
Hamburger stood at 0 in 1970. And it
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started
to rise till 1990 (300). Fish & Chips stood at approximately 70 in 1970.
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After
10 period of years it dropped
sharply
from 1970 to 1990. And last one is Pizza was 300 and was higher result than others.
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But
it declined year by year
especially
between 1970 and 1980. In
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addition
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from 1980 and 1990
there wasn't any
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changes
to Pizza.
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IELTS academic The line graph below shows changes in fast food consumed in the UK between 1970and 1990

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