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The line graph below provides data that the figure for people who visited to four museums in different country in over the world( Louvre , Vatican , Lodon Science and Shenzhen Museums) over a period of 35 years

The line graph below provides data that the figure for people who visited to four museums in different country in over the world( Louvre, Vatican, Lodon Science and Shenzhen Museums) over a period of 35 years PL7dw
The line graph below provides data that the figure for people who visited to four museums in different country in over the world( Louvre, Vatican, Lodon Science and Shenzhen Museums) over a period of 35 years Overall, People tend to visit the Louvre Museum, with between 8 millions to 9 millions visitors each year. The least were The London Science Museums and The Shezhen Museums with less than 4 millions visitors every year. The number of visitors to the Shenzhen Museum fluctuated on thirty five years. They fell down from under 4 mllions to more than 3 millons visitors in 4980 and 2000, followed by, they rose to just about 4 millions. In addition, the amount of people visting to the London Science Museum decreased dramatically from above 4 millions in 4980 to around 2 millons in 2045. By contract, there was a rapidly increased in visitors to the Vatican Museums between under 5 millions and approximately 9 millions in a 35-year period.
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IELTS academic The line graph below provides data that the figure for people who visited to four museums in different country in over the world( Louvre, Vatican, Lodon Science and Shenzhen Museums) over a period of 35 years

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