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The line graph and bar chart illustrate the amount of international migration in the UK in 10 years periods from 1990 to 2008. Units are measured in thousands.

The line graph and bar chart illustrate the amount of international migration in the UK in 10 years periods from 1990 to 2008. Units are measured in thousands. nd08g
The line graph and bar chart illustrate the amount of international migration in the UK in 10 years periods from 1990 to 2008. Units are measured in thousands. Overall, it can be seen that the number of immigration and emigration were increased, but immigration rate were significantly higher through out the given period. The total of long -term international migration was fluctuated, it was peaked in 2004 and 2007. It is noticeable that at the beginning the amount of immigrate was around 450 thousand. Whereas, emigrate was only at the approximately 300 thousand. Both immigration and emigration rates continuous to rose by the end of the period (2008), immigration comprise almost 600 thousand people, while emigration rate increase to the same level of the first year of the immigration rate at 450 thousand. The terms of the total migration from 1999-2003 the total number were accounted over 100 thousand but not exceed 200 thousand. As in the year of 2004 the number reached a peak at over 250 thousand. The average of the remaining years were at 200 thousands.
The line graph and bar chart illustrate the amount of international migration in the UK in 10 years periods from 1990 to 2008. Units
are measured
in thousands.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
that the number of
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immigration
and emigration
were increased
,
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but
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immigration
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rate
were
significantly
higher
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through out
the
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given
period. The total of long -term international migration
was fluctuated
, it
was peaked
in 2004 and 2007.

It is noticeable that at the beginning the amount of immigrate was around 450 thousand.
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, emigrate was
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at the approximately 300 thousand. Both
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immigration
and emigration
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rates
continuous to rose by the
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end
of the period (2008),
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immigration
comprise almost 600 thousand
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people
, while emigration
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rate
increase to the same level of the
first
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year
of the
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immigration
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rate
at 450 thousand.

The terms of the total migration from 1999-2003 the total number
were accounted
over 100 thousand
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but
not exceed 200 thousand.
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As
in the
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of 2004 the number reached a peak at over 250 thousand. The average of the remaining years were at 200 thousands.
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IELTS academic The line graph and bar chart illustrate the amount of international migration in the UK in 10 years periods from 1990 to 2008. Units are measured in thousands.

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