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"The line charts show the amount of beer sold to pubs and supermarkets over six years, where a bar graph displays the amount of pubs closed over the same period. Summarise the data by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant."

"The line charts show the amount of beer sold to pubs and supermarkets over six years, where a bar graph displays the amount of pubs closed over the same period. R5YpP
Given are the line graph illustrating the revenue of beer sold to pubs and supermarkets in the UK between 2000 and 206 and the bar chart depicting the total number of pubs in the UK over the same period. Overall, the sale of beer to supermarkets witnessed an upward trend over the period, which is opposite to the trends of the others due to the gradual decrease of pubs. Regarding the line graph, in 2000, the volume of beer sold to pubs in the UK was approximately 25000 barrels, which is higher than supermarkets by roughly 15000 barrels. The sale of beer to the supermarkets increased moderately to barely 13000 barrels and is equivalent to the figure of pubs in 2014. After 2 years, the amount of beer sold to pubs and supermarkets were nearly 12000 and roughly 14000 barrels, respectively. As can be seen obviously from the given bar chart, there were 60000 pubs in the UK at the beginning of the period. The figure stabilized until 2021 then fell slightly to 55000 pubs after 8 years. From 2010 to 2016, approximately 5000 pubs were closed in the UK, leading to the reduction in the volume of beer sold to it during the period.
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the line graph illustrating the revenue of beer sold to
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pubs
and supermarkets in the UK between 2000 and 206 and the bar chart depicting the total number of
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pubs
in the UK over the same period.

Overall
, the sale of beer to supermarkets witnessed an upward trend over the period, which is opposite to the trends of the others due to the gradual decrease of pubs.

Regarding the line graph, in 2000, the volume of beer sold to
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pubs
in the UK was approximately 25000
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barrels
, which is higher than supermarkets by roughly 15000
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barrels
. The sale of beer to the supermarkets increased
moderately
to
barely
13000
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barrels
and is equivalent to the figure of
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pubs
in 2014. After 2 years, the amount of beer sold to
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pubs
and supermarkets were
nearly
12000 and roughly 14000
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barrels
,
respectively
.

As can be
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seen
obviously
from the
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given
bar chart, there were 60000
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pubs
in the UK at the beginning of the period. The figure stabilized until 2021 then fell
slightly
to 55000
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pubs
after 8 years. From 2010 to 2016, approximately 5000
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pubs
were closed
in the UK, leading to the reduction in the volume of beer sold to it during the period.
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IELTS academic "The line charts show the amount of beer sold to pubs and supermarkets over six years, where a bar graph displays the amount of pubs closed over the same period.

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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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