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The bar graph compares the number of people that visited the three malls in Somecity over a 20 year period from 1995 to 2015.

The bar graph compares the number of people that visited the three malls in Somecity over a 20 year period from 1995 to 2015. ldBaK
The bar graph compares the number of people that visited the three malls in Somecity over a 20 year period from 1995 to 2015. Overall, the Spendsdave was the least preferred choice amongst the 3 various marketplaces in each year. And, all malls saw an upward trend in visitors throughout the period. Bigshop that had close to 85000 visitors in 1995 observed a steady growth in upcoming years, wherein the year 2010 recorded a to be just below 180000. In the following year-range (2015), the value remained the same as the previous one. Similarly, in the case of the Luxury shopping center, the number rose drastically from 120000 to a little under 140000 between 1995 and 2000. However, a slight increase was recorded by approximately 10000 in 2005. From then onwards, it rose significantly to 180000 in 2015, which had the all-time highest number of visitors for the specified malls. The same pattern of growth was seen in Spendsdave too. The year 2000 and 2005 had the same preference by 60000 people, which skyrocketed to 120000 at the end.
The bar graph compares the number of
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people
that visited the three malls in
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Somecity
over a 20
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period from 1995 to 2015.
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, the
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Spendsdave
was the least preferred choice amongst the 3 various marketplaces in each
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. And, all malls
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an upward trend in visitors throughout the period.

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Bigshop
that had close to 85000 visitors in 1995 observed a steady growth in upcoming years, wherein the
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2010 recorded a to be
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below 180000. In the following year-range (2015), the value remained the same as the previous one.
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, in the case of the Luxury shopping center, the number rose
drastically
from 120000 to a
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under 140000 between 1995 and 2000.
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, a slight increase
was recorded
by approximately 10000 in 2005. From then onwards, it rose
significantly
to 180000 in 2015, which had the all-time highest number of visitors for the specified malls.

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Spendsdave
too. The
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year
2000 and 2005 had the same preference by 60000
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people
, which skyrocketed to 120000 at the
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IELTS academic The bar graph compares the number of people that visited the three malls in Somecity over a 20 year period from 1995 to 2015.

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