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The diahram shows how sports shoes are made.

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The process diagram illustrates the process journey of shoes manufacture. Overall, this process consist of 11 steps. The first step is finalise the design and the last step is the delivery of shoes to shops or in foreign countries. The whole process takes 18 months. Firstly, the initial step would be finalise the design of shoes. After that, raw materials to be collected for manufacturing the shoes such as tannery leather and mill-fabric, rubber sole from other industry. Lator on, the upper part of the shoes would be cut for making. Next, this organs of shoes transfer for sewing and glue the top part together bottom part. After pasting, sport shoes turn to pack in box and that box is inserted in container Finally, the container shifts into warehouse now it is ready for shipping the products in shop or foreign nations.
The
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diagram illustrates the
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process
journey of
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shoes
manufacture.

Overall
, this
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process
consist of 11
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steps
. The
first
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step
is
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finalise
the design and the last
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step
is the delivery of
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shoes
to shops or in foreign countries. The whole
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process
takes 18 months.

Firstly
, the initial
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step
would be
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finalise
the design of
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shoes
. After that, raw materials to
be collected
for manufacturing the
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shoes
such as tannery leather and mill-fabric, rubber sole from other industry.
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Lator
on, the upper part of the
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shoes
would be
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cut
for making.
Next
,
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this
organs of
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shoes
transfer for sewing and glue the top part together bottom part. After pasting, sport
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shoes
turn to pack in box and that box
is inserted
in container

Finally
, the container shifts into warehouse
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now
it is ready for shipping the products in shop or foreign nations.

IELTS academic The diahram shows how sports shoes are made.

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  American English
3 paragraphs
142 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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