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the line chart shows the urbanization rate in South Korea and Indonesia .

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The line graph illustrates the percentage of urbanisation in two countries: South Korea and Indonesia from 1969 to 2009. It is clear that the proportion of both countries experienced overall increase in the urbanisation rate. In South Korea is almost higher than Indonesia over the years. It can be seen that the rate of urbanisation in South Korea was sharply rose during the period between 1969 and 1989. There was a slight increase in the rate of urbanisation Indonesia during the period between 1969 and 1989. In 1969, both countries has the lowest proportion around 20 percent of South Korea was urbanisaton rate, compared to approximate 27 percent of Indonesia urbanisation. There was a rise of over 30% in the rate of urbanisation in Indonesia from 1969 to 2009. In 2009, the rate of urbanisation has the highest in South Korea and in Indonesia, over 80% and just over 50% respectively
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in two countries: South Korea and Indonesia from 1969 to 2009. It is
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that the proportion of both countries experienced
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urbanisation
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. In South Korea is almost higher than Indonesia
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during the period between 1969 and 1989. There was a slight increase in the
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Indonesia during the period between 1969 and 1989. In 1969, both countries has the lowest proportion around 20 percent of South Korea was
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, compared to approximate 27 percent of Indonesia
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in Indonesia from 1969 to 2009. In 2009, the
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