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The line chart shows the percentage of tourist visited Edinburh attractions in Scotland from 1980 to 2000

The line chart shows the percentage of tourist visited Edinburh attractions in Scotland from 1980 to 2000 5L3dm
The line chart shows the percentage of tourist visited Edinburh attractions in Scotland from 1980 to 2000. Overall, as can be seen by the chart, it was popular to visit the castle and less visitor come to the zoo in most of time. In 1980, only 10 % people went to the zoo to compare with 20% of the aquariam 24% of the castle and up to 30% of visitor coming to festival. But these figures had changed for 10 years while the zoo and Aquarium was a similarly trend which went up and then dropped, the number of people who joined Festival fell gradually and the promotion visited the castle that rose quickly. For the next 20 years, form 1990 to 2010, the castle attracted more people and reached a peak at 45 percent in 1995, and then in started decreasing until 2010. The same trend was experienced by the aquarium that peaked at 23% in 1995 and went to the lowest point at 8% in 2010. In other hand, Visitor of the festival nearly stayed between 1995 and 2010, it was around 26%. Meanwhile, the number of sightseeing of the zoo was a fluctuate and got 20% in the first time in 2010.
The line chart
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the percentage of tourist visited
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Edinburh
attractions in Scotland from 1980 to 2000.

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, as can be
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seen
by the chart, it was popular to visit the castle and less visitor
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come
to the zoo in
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most of time
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In 1980,
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10 %
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people
went to the zoo to compare with 20% of the
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aquariam
24% of the castle and up to 30% of visitor coming to festival.
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But
these figures had
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changed
for 10 years while the zoo and Aquarium was a
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similarly trend
which went up and then dropped, the number of
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people
who
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Festival fell
gradually
and the promotion visited the castle that rose
quickly
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For the
next
20 years, form 1990 to 2010, the castle attracted more
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people
and reached a peak at 45 percent in 1995, and then in
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started
decreasing until 2010. The same trend
was experienced
by the aquarium that peaked at 23% in 1995 and went to the lowest point at 8% in 2010. In other hand, Visitor of the festival
nearly
stayed between 1995 and 2010, it was around 26%. Meanwhile, the number of sightseeing of the zoo was
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20% in the
first
time in 2010.
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