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The chart below show the percentage of teenager participating in various form of exercise in the UK in 1984 to 2004.

The chart below show the percentage of teenager participating in various form of exercise in the UK in 1984 to 2004. wen3E
The two bar charts show the percentage of teenagers taking part in different exercise activities in the UK in 1984 and 2004. The information can be grouped into those activities which became more popular over the two decades and those that became less popular. Overall it can be seen that the most popular activities in 1984 and 2004 were jogging and cycling respectively. Several of the activities became more popular. The largest increase was in golf, which was the least popular sport in 1984 at 7%, but shot up to 38% in 2004. The proportion of teenagers cycling jumped by 20% to 68% and there were smaller rises in squash and badminton, which went up by 14% and 11% respectively. There were also declines in popularity of other types of activity. The most dramatic fall in participation was in jogging, which was the most popular sport in 1984, but slumped to 38% from 71% in 2004. This was followed by fishing, which decreased by 29% from 46% and then walking with a drop of 18%. Finally, tennis slipped back 8% in popularity over the period. The popularity of a few activities showed little or no change. For example yoga had a negligible change of 3% and swimming remained constant at 45%.
The two bar charts
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exercise
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in the UK in 1984 and 2004. The information can
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into those
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which became more
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popular
over the two decades and those that became less
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that the most
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activities
in 1984 and 2004 were jogging and cycling
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Several of the
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became more
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popular
. The largest increase was in golf, which was the least
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sport in 1984 at 7%,
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but
shot up to 38% in 2004. The proportion of
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teenagers
cycling jumped by 20% to 68% and there were smaller rises in squash and badminton, which went up by 14% and 11%
respectively
.

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also
declines in popularity of other types of
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activity
. The most dramatic fall in participation was in jogging, which was the most
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popular
sport in 1984,
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slumped to 38% from 71% in 2004. This
was followed
by fishing, which decreased by 29% from 46% and then walking with a drop of 18%.
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, tennis slipped back 8% in popularity over the period.

The popularity of a few
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of 3% and swimming remained constant at 45%.
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IELTS academic The chart below show the percentage of teenager participating in various form of exercise in the UK in 1984 to 2004.

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