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the total oil use from 2009 to 2030

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The line graph compares the amount of oil consumption every day in 4 distinct users between 2009 and 2030. Generally speaking, it is likely that the US, WE/J will be witnessed a downward trend in the quantity of oil use, the opposite will be true for the others during this time frame. Moreover, the amount of oil consumption in the US is predicted to be higher than that in other countries. In 2009, the amount of oil consumption in the US dwarfed that in WE/J, at about 10 million and nearly 4 million respectively. The figures for China and ME intersected at less than 2 million. Meanwhile, oil use in the US witnessed a little fluctuation during the first 6 years and the data of WE/J and China were equal at above 3 million each in 2015. In addition, ME remained at bottom of the list, with about 2 million. In contrast, different trends can be seen in the data of other regions by 2030. The figures for the US and WE/J are expected to see a downward trend, with respective datas being about 3, 5 million and over 2 million. On the other hand, an experienced growth to less than 4 million is witnessed in China, followed by ME at about 3 million.
The line graph compares the amount of
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oil
consumption every day in 4 distinct users between 2009 and 2030.

Generally
speaking, it is likely that the US, WE/J will
be witnessed
a downward trend in the quantity of
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oil
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, the opposite will be true for the others during this time frame.
Moreover
, the amount of
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oil
consumption in the US
is predicted
to be higher than that in
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other
countries.

In 2009, the amount of
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consumption in the US dwarfed that in WE/J, at about 10
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million
and
nearly
4
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million
respectively
. The figures for China and ME intersected at less than 2
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million
. Meanwhile,
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oil
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use
in the US witnessed a
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little
fluctuation during the
first
6 years and the data of WE/J and China were equal at above 3
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million
each in 2015.
In addition
, ME remained at bottom of the list, with about 2 million.

In contrast
,
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different
trends can be
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seen
in the data of
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regions by 2030. The figures for the
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US and
WE/J are
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expected
to
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a downward trend, with respective
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datas
being about 3, 5
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million
and over 2
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. On the
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hand, an experienced growth to less than 4
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is witnessed
in China, followed by ME at about 3
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