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Demonstrate some good manners in some countries OR in your own country.

Demonstrate some good manners in some countries OR in your own country. L9Bn8
There are several table manners in Vietnam that you should know. First of all, wait for the table arrangement before sitting down. The host will invite you to your seat since there are positions allocated for each person based on the difference in age. Secondly, wait for the oldest people to start first. In Vietnam, many generations live under one roof, thus it is essential to show your respect, caring, and politeness to the elderly. Thirdly, pass your bowl with both hands. This is a way you show your respect to the older. Fourthly, do not point the chopsticks to anyone It is really rude when you point your chopsticks to others at the dining table. Do not make this mistake unless you want to upset the host. Finally, do not eat directly from shared dishes. Remember to pick out the food from shared dishes to your bowl first, and then eat it.
There are several table manners in Vietnam that you should know.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, wait for the table arrangement
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before
sitting down. The host will invite you to your seat since there are positions allocated for each person based on the difference in age.
Secondly
, wait for the oldest
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
first
. In Vietnam,
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many
generations
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
under one roof,
thus
it is essential to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
your respect, caring, and politeness to the elderly.
Thirdly
, pass your bowl with both hands. This is a way you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
your respect to the older.
Fourthly
, do not point the chopsticks to anyone It is
really
rude when you point your chopsticks to others at the dining table. Do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
this mistake unless you want to upset the host.
Finally
, do not eat
directly
from shared dishes. Remember to pick out the food from shared dishes to your bowl
first
, and then eat it.
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