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The line chart illustrates the volume of gold sales every month in Dubai in 2002.

The line chart illustrates the volume of gold sales every month in Dubai in 2002. 73MR6
The given line chart illustrates the volume of gold sales every month in Dubai in 2002. The initial impression from the chart is that there was a substantial erratic in the sales of gold. It is also clear that there was strong growth in the first two months, while the two last ones witnessed stability. As can be seen from the graph, the figure for gold sales in Dubai, in the meantime, started at 200 million Dirhams in January, then its volume increased minimally to 250, followed by a top at 350, in February and March, respectively. By contrast, gold sales experienced a steady fall from 350 million Dirhams to just above 100 in July, which meant it had the lowest sales than other months. After that, this figure rose sharply to around 200 in August, overtaking the last four months. Finally, despite dipping remarkably in September, the figure then increased slightly to approximately 150 in October and remained stable until the end of the period.
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line chart illustrates the volume of gold
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sales
every
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month
in Dubai in 2002.

The initial impression from the chart is that there was a substantial erratic in the
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sales
of gold. It is
also
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clear
that there was strong growth in the
first
two
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months
, while the two last ones witnessed stability.

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seen
from the graph, the figure for gold
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sales
in Dubai, in the meantime,
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started
at 200 million
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Dirhams
in January, then its volume increased
minimally
to 250, followed by a top at 350, in February and March,
respectively
.

By contrast, gold
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sales
experienced a steady fall from 350 million
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Dirhams
to
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just
above 100 in July, which meant it had the lowest
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sales
than other
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months
. After that, this figure rose
sharply
to around 200 in August, overtaking the last four
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months
.
Finally
, despite dipping
remarkably
in September, the figure then increased
slightly
to approximately 150 in October and remained stable until the
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end
of the period.
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IELTS academic The line chart illustrates the volume of gold sales every month in Dubai in 2002.

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