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The line chart illustrate the four motivations of movers to relocate to metropolitan areas

The line chart illustrate the four motivations of movers to relocate to metropolitan areas KV06M

The line chart illustrate the four motivations of movers to relocate to metropolitan areas. In the overview, numberous of immigrants tranfer due to their occupation and academic programs. The moving for the work purpose began at 61, 000 in 2000 and increased rapidly to 85, 000 in 2005- before reaching the point 92, 000 in 2010- the highest point of any reason and any year. Then the line has falling down slightly to 87, 000 in 2015 (reduce 5000 compare to 2010) but it is still a high rate. However, this category still increase for the entire period. Elsewhere, the figure of people relocating for academic programs purpose have a greatest increase in overall with a jump of 62, 000. It rose steeply in the first period- from 2000 to 2005 by 22, 000 and grown slowly in the next period from 2005 to 2010 just around 7000. It increase considerably again from 2020 to 2015 about 33000 (on a level with those relocating for job) Turning to “adventure” this category climb most steadily of all four reasons, just 4, 000 over the entire period from 2000 to 2015. Beside, the number of people relocating for family and friend increase gently in first ten years from 2000 to 2015 (12, 000 to 22, 000), and levelling off around 23, 000 in last period in 2015. In brief, the graph tell us that, the was an increase in each of reason for moving to metropolitan ares in every period, with the greatest rising of citing study and moving the the adventure is not a popular reason.

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