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The table compares two primary schools in terms of the proportions of their pupils who experienced seven different educational difficulties in the years 2005 and 2015

The table compares two primary schools in terms of the proportions of their pupils who experienced seven different educational difficulties in the years 2005 and 2015 5B5Mm
The table compares two primary schools in terms of the proportions of their pupils who experienced seven different educational difficulties in the years 2005 and 2015 It is undeniable that school A had higher proportions of children with all seven educational problems in both years. However, while school A managed to lessen the incidence of most of the issues between 2005 and 2015, school B observed an overall rise in the percentage of children who were struggling In 2005, 42% of school A’s pupils found it difficult to follow instructions, whereas only 6% of pupils in school B experienced this problem. Similarly, between 30 and 40 percent of children attending school A had problems in the areas of spelling, listening, verbal expression, and concentration in lessons, while the equivalent figures for school B stood at between 5 and 15 percent In 2015, the difference between the two schools was less pronounced. Notably, the proportion of children who struggled to follow instructions fell by 24% in school A, and this school also saw falls of 22%, 15%, 14%, and 5% in the figures for children who had problems with concentration, listening, verbal expression and spelling. In school B, however, the proportion of children who struggled with spelling and following instructions doubled, to 10% and 12% respectively, and there was almost no change in the incidence of listening, verbal or concentration problems. Finally, the reading and handwriting metrics for both schools were stable during the two years studied.
The table compares two primary
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in terms of the proportions of their pupils
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experienced seven
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educational difficulties in the years 2005 and 2015

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A had higher proportions of
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with all seven educational
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problems
in both years.
However
, while
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A managed to lessen the incidence of most of the issues between 2005 and 2015,
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B observed an
overall
rise in the percentage of
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children
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who
were struggling

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A’s pupils found it difficult to follow instructions, whereas
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only
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B experienced this
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problem
.
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attending
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A had
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problems
in the areas of spelling, listening, verbal expression, and concentration in lessons, while the equivalent figures for
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B stood at between 5 and 15 percent

In 2015, the difference between the two
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was less pronounced.
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struggled to follow instructions fell by 24% in
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falls of 22%, 15%, 14%, and 5% in the figures for
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had
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with concentration, listening, verbal expression and spelling. In
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B,
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of
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struggled with spelling and following instructions doubled, to 10% and 12%
respectively
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change
in the incidence of listening, verbal or concentration
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.
Finally
, the reading and handwriting metrics for both
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were stable during the two years studied.
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IELTS academic The table compares two primary schools in terms of the proportions of their pupils who experienced seven different educational difficulties in the years 2005 and 2015

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