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The line chart demonstrates the rate of people living in Australia who migrated from various religions such as: Asia, the

The line chart demonstrates the rate of people living in Australia who migrated from various religions such as: Asia, the PLrWp
The line chart demonstrates the rate of people living in Australia who migrated from various religions such as: Asia, the UK and other religions. In general, most regions revealed an upward trend in the rate of people at the end of the period except for the United Kingdom. In detail, the ratios of the people in Asia reached of a peak from the lowest point at around 2, 5 % to the highest point at 15% in the final period. By comparison, total and other regions followed quite the same pattern of changes, although the former always outstripped the latter by at least two times over the years. Specifically, notwithstanding a plunge in the first three years, the latter soared to a high of nearly 14% prior to decline to about 13 % in the final period whereas after falling down from around 23% to 20% in the first 6 years, the former surged to a peak of 25% in 2011. Unlike others, the UK saw the downward trend from the highest point of approximately 14% to the lowest point of 5% in the last mileage. Strikingly, in the middle of 1996 and 2001, Asia and the UK shared the equal proportions of immigrants
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people
living in Australia who migrated from various religions

such as: Asia, the UK and other religions.
In general
, most regions revealed an upward trend in the rate

of
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people
at the
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end
of the period
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except for
the United Kingdom. In detail, the ratios of the
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people
in Asia

reached of a peak from the lowest point at around 2, 5 % to the highest point at 15% in the final period. By

comparison, total and other regions followed quite the same pattern of
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changes
, although the former

always outstripped the latter by at least two times over the years.
Specifically
, notwithstanding a plunge in the

first
three years, the latter soared to a high of
nearly
14% prior to decline to about 13 % in the final

period whereas after falling down from around 23% to 20% in the
first
6 years, the former surged to a

peak of 25% in 2011.

Unlike others, the UK
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saw
the downward trend from the highest point of approximately 14% to the lowest

point of 5% in the last mileage.
Strikingly
, in the middle of 1996 and 2001, Asia and the UK shared the

equal proportions of immigrants
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IELTS academic The line chart demonstrates the rate of people living in Australia who migrated from various religions such as: Asia, the

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