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In recent years, the frequent occurrence of school bullying has caused many people to pay attention to this issue. According to research, school bullying refers to aggressive behavior that is repeated and associated with inequality of power (Smith, 2016). The problem of school bullying cause physical and mental damage to victims. However, some of the victims are not even aware that they are being bullied. As a social problem that damages young people's health, more and more organizations in the world have realized that they need to pay attention to school bullying. This essay will illustrate the vital role that people's civic organizations play in combating school bullying. Natalie Hampton is the founder of a software called "It with Us". She was an ordinary American high school student. She attended a private high school, and during seventh and eighth grade, she usually ate lunch alone. She was pushed into a locker and threatened with e-mails, and had been physically attacked three times in two weeks. When she went home, her body was covered in bruises and blood. She had no choice but to change school, but the memory of those years haunted her. When she was alone at lunch, she looked at the students walking back and forth in front of her and wished someone would stop and say, "Are you OK? "This inspired her to use" Sit with Us "to develop a software to help students who were also bullied in real life. It was a free app where students could register as ambassadors, and the school would provide special seats and label them, When students can't find a seat, they can find an Ambassador's table through the app. Every student who registers as Ambassador promises that they will be kind and welcomes everyone. Natalie Hampton's software raised awareness of the social issue of school bullying. She received a lot of feedback from people who uses Sit With Us. And according to the app, around 50 students look for help from Sit With Us every month. Thanks to the development of the app, school bullying cases in the United States decreased by 5% compared to the previous year. Countries are being forced to face up to the seriousness of school bullying. A survey in New Zealand found that the rate of bullying in New Zealand schools has barely changed over the past decade, from 2001 to 2007 and 2012. At the same time, new forms of bullying, cyberbullying, are on the rise. Some people in New Zealand spontaneously set up a "Pink Red Shirt Day" to let more people know about school bullying, and encourage children who suffer from bullying to learn how to protect themselves and fight against bullying. In response, the New Zealand government is trying to minimize the harm caused by school bullying and developed policies to do so. For example, some jurisdictions now have "zero tolerance" policies, under which students who engage in aggressive behavior are automatically suspended. And the government has set up a special day called "Pink Shirt Day", on which schools will ask all students to wear pink. The goal is to encourage bullied children to be brave, strong and say no to bullying. At the same time, there will be activities and posters on that day to publicize the harm of school bullying. There are also some students who will be sharing their own experiences to encourage and help students who have been bullied. Pink Shirt Day helps New Zealanders learn more about school bullying, and help them to become more aware of this social issue. With the support of these civic activities, the issue of school violence in New Zealand has received more attention. Dr John Grant has also expressed his heartfelt concern for children’s mental health. With the help of people, more targeted interventions can be provided to victims of bullying, and a haven is provided for the victim where he/she can discuss the effects of bullying, and remind him/her of the personal power to combat negative self-images. Under these activities, more and more students are encouraged, which seems to be a trivial thing, but actually can help a lot in life. More and more volunteers are emerging, but not all of them are kind. Some people found business opportunities in this way, and use the mentality of school bullies to cheat them out of their money. Therefore, we also need more standardized and large groups to protect them, and more official methods, such as official software like "Sit with US" that can effectively avoid such situation. School bullying continues to happen. It is these kind people in the civil society who always stand up bravely to help more people and draw the attention of the society to this problem. There is no doubt that such organizations have played a very positive role in school bullying.
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to this issue. According to research,
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school
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refers to aggressive behavior that
is repeated
and associated with inequality of power (Smith, 2016). The problem of
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school
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bullying
cause physical and mental damage to
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victims
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some of the
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victims
are not even aware that they are being
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bullied
. As a social problem that damages young
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people
's health, more and more organizations in the world have realized that they need to pay
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attention
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school
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. This essay will illustrate the vital role that
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people
's civic organizations play in combating
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bullying.

Natalie Hampton is the founder of a
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software
called
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It with Us
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. She was an ordinary American high
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. She attended a private high
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school
, and during seventh and eighth grade, she
usually
ate lunch alone.
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She
was pushed
into a locker and threatened with e-mails, and had been
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attacked three times in two weeks. When she went home, her body
was covered
in bruises and blood. She had no choice
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to
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,
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the memory of those years haunted her. When she was alone at lunch, she looked at the
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walking back and forth in front of her and wished someone would
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and say,
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Are you OK?
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with Us
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to develop a
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software
to
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help
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students
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who
were
also
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bullied
in real life. It was a free app where
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students
could register as ambassadors, and the
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school
would provide special seats and label them, When
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students
can't find a seat, they can find an Ambassador's table through the app. Every
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student
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who
registers as Ambassador promises that they will be kind and welcomes everyone.

Natalie Hampton's
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software
raised awareness of the social issue of
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school
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bullying
. She received
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a lot of
feedback from
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people
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who
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uses
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Sit
With Us. And according to the app, around 50
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students
look for
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help
from
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Sit
With Us every month. Thanks to the development of the app,
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school
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bullying
cases in the United States decreased by 5% compared to the previous year.

Countries are
being forced
to face up to the seriousness of
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school
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bullying
. A survey in
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New
Zealand found that the rate of
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bullying
in
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New
Zealand
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schools
has
barely
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changed
over the past decade, from 2001 to 2007 and 2012. At the same time,
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new
forms of
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, cyberbullying, are on the rise.
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Some
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people
in
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spontaneously
set up a
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Pink Red Shirt Day
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to
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more
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people
know about
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, and encourage children
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who
suffer from
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to learn how to protect themselves and fight against
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bullying
. In response, the
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New
Zealand
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government
is trying to minimize the harm caused by
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school
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bullying
and developed policies to do
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.
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jurisdictions
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have
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zero tolerance
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policies, under which
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students
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who
engage in aggressive behavior are
automatically
suspended. And the
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government
has set up a special day called
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Pink Shirt Day
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, on which
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schools
will ask all
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students
to wear pink. The goal is to encourage
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bullied
children to be brave, strong and say no to
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bullying
. At the same time, there will be activities and posters on that day to publicize the harm of
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school
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bullying
. There are
also
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some
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students
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who
will be sharing their
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own
experiences to encourage and
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students
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who
have been
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. Pink Shirt Day
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helps
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New
Zealanders learn more about
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school
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, and
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help
them to become more aware of this social issue.

With the support of these civic activities, the issue of
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school
violence in
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New
Zealand has received more
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attention
. Dr John Grant has
also
expressed his heartfelt concern for children’s mental health. With the
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help
of
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people
, more targeted interventions can
be provided
to
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victims
of
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bullying
, and a haven
is provided
for the
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victim
where he/she can discuss the effects of
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bullying
, and remind him/her of the personal power to combat
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negative
self-images. Under these activities, more and more
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students
are encouraged
, which seems to be a trivial thing,
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but
actually can
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help
a lot in life.

More and more volunteers are emerging,
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but
not all of them are kind.
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Some
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people
found business opportunities in this way, and
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use
the mentality of
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school
bullies to cheat them out of their money.
Therefore
, we
also
need more standardized and large groups to protect them, and more official methods, such as official
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software
like
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"
Sit with US
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"
that can
effectively
avoid such situation.

School
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bullying
continues to happen. It is these kind
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people
in the civil society
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who
always stand up
bravely
to
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help
more
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people
and draw the
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attention
of the society to this problem. There is no doubt that such organizations have played a
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role in
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IELTS academic The Iris Iris the exhibition is a place

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7 paragraphs
807 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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