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The information below shows the number of fruits sold by a greengrocer over a bank holiday weekend and the number of visitors at the greengrocer at the bank holiday weekend.

The information below shows the number of fruits sold by a greengrocer over a bank holiday weekend and the number of visitors at the greengrocer at the bank holiday weekend. DwEmj
The bar graph and table illustrates the information of four popular fruits sold by a greengrocer in a bank holiday weekend and how many people visited the shop on Saturday, Sunday, and Monday respectively. On Saturday, 776 people visited the greengrocer but only 40 apples and 22 pears were bought by the visitors. While on Sunday, around 48 apples and 35 pears were sold despite having 1, 253 visitors which was the highest in the weekend. The next day sales of apples decreased around 13 and the sales of pears had a slight decline. Around 25 oranges and 10 plums were sold by the fruit shop at the beginning of weekend. The sales increases and vendor sells around 42 oranges and 18 plums on Sunday. Only plums had the highest selling scores on Monday while oranges had a gradual downfall in their sales. Overall, apples were the highest selling fruit during the bank holiday weekend and plums was the only fruit whose sales increased significantly on daily basis.
The bar graph and table illustrates the information of four popular
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sold by a greengrocer in a bank holiday
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weekend
and how
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people
visited the shop on Saturday, Sunday, and Monday
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On Saturday, 776
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people
visited the greengrocer
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only
40
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apples
and 22 pears were
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bought
by the visitors. While on Sunday, around 48
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apples
and 35 pears
were sold
despite having 1, 253 visitors which was the highest in the
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weekend
. The
next
day
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sales
of
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apples
decreased around 13 and the
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sales
of pears had a slight decline.

Around 25 oranges and 10
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plums
were sold
by the
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fruit
shop at the beginning of
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weekend
. The
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sales
increases and vendor sells around 42 oranges and 18
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plums
on Sunday.
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Only
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plums
had the highest selling scores on Monday while oranges had a gradual downfall in their sales.

Overall
,
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apples
were the highest selling
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fruit
during the bank holiday
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weekend
and
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plums
was the
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fruit
whose
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sales
increased
significantly
on daily basis.

IELTS academic The information below shows the number of fruits sold by a greengrocer over a bank holiday weekend and the number of visitors at the greengrocer at the bank holiday weekend.

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