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the honey production process

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the diagram above shows how the honey is made by bees. we can clearly see there are seven steps of honey production until the honey is ready to be consumed. first, a group of honey bees build its own hive consisting of many built cells which is take role as a container of the honey. bees go out of the hive to find some flowers in needs of the nectar. they take the nectar and bring it back to their hive to begin the honey-forming proccess. In the hive, they fill each cells with the nectar. after that, they cool down the nectar by giving it air from their wings flapping. this process will make the nectar evaporates and the water is lost. finally, consumable honey is successfully formed and ready to use.
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the
diagram above
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shows
how the honey
is made
by bees.
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we
can
clearly
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see
there are seven steps of honey production until the honey is ready to
be consumed
.

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first
, a group of honey bees build its
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own
hive consisting of
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many
built cells which is take role as a container of the honey.
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bees
go out of the hive to find
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some
flowers in needs of the
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nectar
.
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they
take the
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nectar
and bring it back to their hive to
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begin
the honey-forming
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proccess
.

In the hive, they fill each
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cells
with the
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nectar
.
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after
that, they cool down the
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nectar
by giving it air from their wings flapping.
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this
process will
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make
the
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nectar
evaporates and the water
is lost
.
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finally
, consumable honey is
successfully
formed and ready to
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use
.
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IELTS academic the honey production process

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
133 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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