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The bar graph shows the divorce ratio od two european countries

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The bar graph illustrates the Percentage of divorces of Finland and Sweden between 2011 and 2015. Swedan, divorce percentage was about 45 percent in 2011, which is approximately 8 percentage higher than Finland. In 2012 it roses about fifty percent. However, it depicts a gradual decrease to about 47percentage in 2013, and continued to decline steadily for the end of the period reaching about 45 percentage in 2014 and hitting to the low point of about 37 Percentage in 2015. The divorce rate in Finland was less than 40 percentage in 2011, and it decreased nearly 3 percentage in 2013. However, the figure experienced a steady increase for next two years. It roses to about 39 percentage in 2013, and approximately 3 percentage in 2014, and remained constant for last year, outracing the rate of Swedan. Overall, Finland shows the an upward trend whilst, swedan shows a downward trend. Both countries shows some fluctuations.
The bar graph illustrates the
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Percentage
of divorces of Finland and Sweden between 2011 and 2015.

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Swedan
, divorce
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was about 45 percent in 2011, which is approximately 8
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higher than Finland. In
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2012 it
roses about fifty percent.
However
, it depicts a gradual decrease to about
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47percentage
in 2013, and continued to decline
steadily
for the
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end
of the period reaching about 45
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percentage
in 2014 and hitting to the low point of about 37
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Percentage
in 2015.

The divorce rate in Finland was less than 40
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percentage
in 2011, and it decreased
nearly
3
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percentage
in 2013.
However
, the figure experienced a steady increase for
next
two years.
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It roses
to about 39
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percentage
in 2013, and approximately 3
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percentage
in 2014, and remained constant for last year, outracing the rate of
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Swedan
.

Overall
, Finland
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shows
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the an
upward trend whilst,
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swedan
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shows
a downward trend. Both countries
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shows
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fluctuations.

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