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The information below show a beachside area in Australia in 1950 and today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The information below show a beachside area in Australia in 1950 and today. y7LOr
The maps illustrates the development which took place beachfront area in Australia from 1950 to now. As being elucidated from the maps, in 1950 the road was small in lenght but now it has been expanded and attached it with the light house. There was a play ground on the left side of the beach, then it is converted into the car park besides dining tables and a summer house. On the north east side there was one more car park but it is now extended in length. Moving towards the rest of the development, on the south west side there was plane area but now there is a large restaurant. Moreover, in past there was only 25m wide pool on the south west side but now it is expanded to 50m long and two surf clubs are introduced on both sides of beach, on the left side surf club is in between the cafe and pool on the opposite it is between the light house and pool. From the overall analysis, it is manifest that the cark park area which was attached with road goes underwent significant over the period with the introduction of new facilities.
The maps
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illustrates
the development which took place beachfront area in Australia from 1950 to
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now
. As
being elucidated
from the maps, in 1950 the road was
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small
in
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lenght
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but
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now
it has
been expanded
and attached it with the light
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
. There was a play ground on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
side of the beach, then it
is converted
into the car park
besides
dining tables and a summer
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
. On the
This expression is normally spelled as one or with hyphen.
north east
side there was one more car park
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but
it is
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now
extended in length. Moving towards the rest of the development, on the
This expression is normally spelled as one or with hyphen.
south west
side there was
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plane
area
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but
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now
there is a large restaurant.
Moreover
, in past there was
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only
Insert a space between the numerical value and the unit symbol "25 m"
25m
wide pool on the
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south west
side
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
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now
it
is expanded
to
Insert a space between the numerical value and the unit symbol "50 m"
50m
long and two surf clubs
are introduced
on both
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sides
of beach, on the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
side surf club is in between the
'cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"
cafe
and pool on the opposite it is between the light
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
and pool. From the
overall
analysis, it is manifest that
After 'the', do not use a verb. Make sure that the spelling of 'cark' is correct. If 'cark' is the first word in a compound adjective, use a hyphen between the two words. Note: This error message can occur if you use a verb as a noun, and the word is not a noun in standard English.
the cark
park area which
was attached
with road goes underwent significant over the period with the introduction of new facilities.
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IELTS academic The information below show a beachside area in Australia in 1950 and today.

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