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The information about five different type of jams from 2009 to 2014

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The information about five different type of jams from 2009 to 2014 is depicted by line graph. From overall perspective, it readily apparent that expect the sales of plum jam, others jams showed upward trend in given time period. Looking into details, starting at 2. 6 million in 2009. The sales of plum jam experienced declined trend and it reached at 1. 5 million in 2011. In next years, it recorded 0. 5 million in 2014. The sales of cherry jam was 1. 2 million. Followed by grape, it accounted 0. 7 million. The sales of cherry stood at 2 million in 2011 whereas the sales of grape noticed constant growth and in 2014 it end with 3. 5 million. Moving further, There was dramatic increase observed in sales of cherry from 2011 to 2014. And it stable at 2. 5 million. The sales of strawberry and raspberry was 3. 5 million in 2009. In 2012 both are intersect at 5 million. From 2012 the sales of raspberry fluctuating between 5 million and 6 million till 2014. There was only 2 million difference between strawberry and raspberry in last year
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, starting at 2. 6
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in 2009. The
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of plum jam experienced declined trend and it reached at 1. 5
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in 2011. In
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in 2014. The
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of cherry jam was 1. 2
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. Followed by grape, it accounted 0. 7
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. The
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of cherry stood at 2
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in 2011 whereas the
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of grape noticed constant growth and in 2014 it
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with 3. 5 million.

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, There was dramatic increase observed in
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of cherry from 2011 to 2014. And it
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at 2. 5 million.

The
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of strawberry and raspberry was 3. 5
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in 2009. In 2012 both are
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at 5
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. From 2012 the
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of raspberry fluctuating between 5
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and 6
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till 2014. There was
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2
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difference between strawberry and raspberry in last
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year
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IELTS academic The information about five different type of jams from 2009 to 2014

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5 paragraphs
189 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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