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The given diagram give information about young people studying in high school in 2000, 2005,2010

The given diagram give information about young people studying in high school in 2000, 2005, 2010 DoLao
The given bar graph delineates the comparison between the percentile of young ones who engaged in tertiary education in last three years in distinct nations such as Country A, B, C and D. From an overall perspective, it is clearly evident that the maximum young individuals of Country D had involved in higher education; however, the minimum number of Country B people interested in higher studies. Strikingly, the percentage of youth had inclined in every country except Country B. As apparent from the bar graph, in Country D, 64% young ones involved in tertiary education in 2000; this number was increased drastically to 80% in 2010. Yet, 38% of Country A individuals was enrolled in higher studies in 2000, which was 26% less than the Country D percentage. In 2005 and 2010, about 52% and 62% youth had been interested in tertiary education of Country A. It is further vivid that the young generation of Country C had highest enroll in higher studies as relative to Country B. From 2000 to 2010, the percentage of young people in Country B had been fluctuated; it was 46% in 2000; after that, it had been declined steadily to 41% and then rose to 43% in 2010. Total 46% young ones of Country C was indulged in higher studies in 2000. Strikingly, the rate of Country C individuals was similar in 2005 and 2010, approximately 52%.
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young
ones who engaged in tertiary
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education
in last three years in distinct nations such as
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Country
A, B, C and D.

From an
overall
perspective, it is
clearly
evident that the maximum
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young
individuals of
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Country
D had involved in higher
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education
;
however
, the minimum number of
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Country
B
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people
interested in higher
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studies
.
Strikingly
, the percentage of youth had inclined in every
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country
except
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Country
B.

As apparent from the bar graph, in
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D, 64%
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young
ones involved in tertiary
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education
in 2000; this number
was increased
drastically
to 80% in 2010.
Yet
, 38% of
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Country
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A individuals
was enrolled
in higher
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studies
in 2000, which was 26% less than the
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D percentage. In 2005 and 2010, about 52% and 62% youth had
been interested
in tertiary
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education
of
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Country
A.

It is
further
vivid that the
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young
generation of
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Country
C had highest enroll in higher
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studies
as relative to
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Country
B. From 2000 to 2010, the percentage of
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young
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people
in
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Country
B had
been fluctuated
; it was 46% in 2000; after that, it had
been declined
steadily
to 41% and then rose to 43% in 2010. Total 46%
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young
ones of
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C
was indulged
in higher
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studies
in 2000.
Strikingly
, the rate of
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C individuals was similar in 2005 and 2010, approximately 52%.
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