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The illustration demontrates how the milk is producted to offer to customer.

The illustration demontrates how the milk is producted to offer to customer. 7P0wk
The illustration demontrates how the milk is producted to offer to customer. It is a milk production and it is nam- made process. There are eight stages from factory to shope or supermarket. First of all, the cows are taken care of in farm. After they grow up, they are shipped to the factory. Thank to machine, employees give milk's cows and put it in the refrigeration storage. After that, milk tanker daily delivery all mike product to Dairy factory. secondly, all milk cows is processed in the system. It create two product including milk and cheese, cream and butter. After that, both product are pasteurized and packaged. Finally, it is transported to supermarket and shops in conclusion, throughing this process, it seems to be that, milk is processed by the system and that process takes about 2 to 3 days to meet the demand for consumers.
The illustration
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demontrates
how the
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milk
is
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producted
to offer to customer. It is a
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milk
production and it is
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nam
- made process. There are eight stages from factory to
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shope
or supermarket.

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First of all
, the cows
are taken
care of in farm. After they grow up, they
are shipped
to the factory. Thank to machine, employees give milk's cows and put it in the refrigeration storage. After that,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
milk
tanker daily delivery all mike product to Dairy factory.

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secondly
, all
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milk
cows
is processed
in the system. It
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create
two product including
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milk
and cheese, cream and butter. After that, both product
are pasteurized
and packaged.
Finally
, it
is transported
to supermarket and shops

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in
conclusion,
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throughing
this process, it seems to be that,
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milk
is processed
by the system and that process takes about 2 to 3 days to
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meet
the demand for consumers.
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IELTS academic The illustration demontrates how the milk is producted to offer to customer.

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