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The Gross Domestic Product from IT and Service Industry of the UK from 1992 to 2000

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The bar chart illustrates the differences between two industries’ contributions as percentages to the whole British’s GDP, from 1992 to 2000. The overall trend is that the IT industry tends to have higher percentages compared to the service industry. it is obvious that from 1992 to 1994 that the IT industry has a higher percentage comparing to the service industry, with an increase of 2% in 1994. but in 1996 the IT industry slightly dropped. However, for the service industry, the biggest increase is from 1992 to 1994 which is about 2%. then in 1996, it grew slightly. After 1996, the IT industry is still bigger than the service industry. It also rose sharply to its highest peak and it doubled its growth in 1992. similar to the first 4 years the service industry grew slightly throughout the years.
The bar chart illustrates the differences between two
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industries’
contributions as percentages to the whole British’s GDP, from 1992 to 2000. The
overall
trend is that the IT
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industry
tends to have higher percentages compared to the
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service
industry.

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it
is obvious that from 1992 to 1994 that the IT
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industry
has a higher percentage comparing to the
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service
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industry
, with an increase of 2% in 1994.
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but
in 1996 the IT
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industry
slightly
dropped.
However
, for the
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service
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industry
, the biggest increase is from 1992 to 1994 which is about 2%.
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then
in 1996, it grew
slightly
.

After 1996, the IT
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industry
is
still
bigger than the
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service
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industry
. It
also
rose
sharply
to its highest peak and it doubled its growth in 1992.
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similar
to the
first
4 years the
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service
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industry
grew
slightly
throughout the years.

IELTS academic The Gross Domestic Product from IT and Service Industry of the UK from 1992 to 2000

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